Hi, Y’all! It’s time for Snippet Sunday again. It’s February and what better time for a sweet contemporary romance?
This week I introduce Gypsy Rose’s mom and more than one decision Gypsy Rose needs to make.
This is a rough draft and the only eyes on it has been mine… so remember this is a diamond in the rough please be kind.
Sweet Gypsy Rose copyright 2014
I finish putting the new stuff out on display when mom comes in. I’m glad to see her. She comes in most days but what time she shows up is a crap shoot. When she is off exploring with Ebby my niece picks up the slack if she isn’t tied up with cheer-leading or whatever teenage girls have going on these days. My mind clouds up when I remember my life at her age.
“Dollar for your thoughts.” My mom’s cheery voice snaps me back to the present.
“I think that’s a penny mom.” I chuckle.
“A penny doesn’t even buy a piece of bubble gum anymore so I figure your thoughts should be worth at least a dollar.” She pulls me into a big hug. I’m thankful she is a tiny woman or she might suffocate me with those tight hugs.
“Whats wrong sweetie?”
“All is good mom. I have a date tonight and was wondering if you would be in today or if I needed to call Whippoorwill. With my luck you wouldn’t be here and she would be off doing whatever it is she is into this week.”
“I see, then you remembered what you were doing at her age and that’s why the sad look.”
I look quickly away and hope we don’t go into her thoughts on that again. I really want to talk about my date, she will have some good ideas I’m sure. I turn to see her colorful skirt disappearing into the back. I take of to catch her. “Wait mom!”
“I thought I’d bake you a batch of those chocolate rolls you like so much. Those always make you feel better.”
“MMM Ok. When you come back down I want to talk about this date. I told him I would show him around town. I have no idea what he likes or doesn’t like. Should I take him out or take him to dinner at my place or what? I’ve never been the one to ask a guy out first.”
“I see it’s not with Ray or you wouldn’t be asking any of these questions. Sounds like someone new in town. Who is it sweetie.”
“Frank the new man at the bank.”
“Really? He is a bit of an oddity around here. Seems friendly but from what I hear he is a loner, never goes out or anything.” She stops moving and taps her chin with a long red nail. “ Elsie, one of the tellers at the bank told us the other night at bingo she has invited him over a few times to dinner or out to bingo and he always has an excuse. She says he usually eats his lunch in his office and rarely sits in the lounge room. She also said she sees him clean his desk every time a client leaves and she thinks he uses a bottle of sanitizer a day.”
“Mom I doubt anyone can use a whole bottle of that a day. The ones the bank has are huge. Besides Elsie is a busybody and a nag. No wonder he turned her down. She’s enough to scare anyone off.”
“She’s not the only one that says that kind of stuff about him. Everything I hear makes him sound like one of those Germiphobes.”
“Well that’s good to know. I’ll keep that in mind while planning.Any suggestions on what to do?”
“Let me think about it while I’m cooking your chocolate rolls. Though you can rule out taking him to your place.”
“My place isn’t that dirty mom.” I roll my eyes like a teenager. Then I remember I worked all night and the house isn’t as clean as usual.
“I wasn’t exactly thinking about neatness.” She shot me an odd look.
I nibble my nails trying to figure out what she is talking about.
“Your problem is over 6 foot tall and even though he has his own place seems to stay at yours.” She smacks my hand from my mouth. “You better not do that around your new man if he has germ issues.”
“He’s not my new man. Yet.” I let out an exasperated puff of air. ” Yeah I am going to have to have a talk with Ray.” I know she is right. Mothers are always right. Or that’s what I have always been told.
I hope you are enjoying this story and will come back next for more Sweet Gypsy Rose.
If you missed meeting Gypsy Rose week 1 you can catch up here. https://cathybrockman.com/2016/01/10/snippetsunday-sweet-and-funny-time/
If you Missed meeting Frank you can check him out here https://cathybrockman.com/2016/01/17/snippetsundaylets-lighten-up-our-readssweet-romance-time/
Want to read about a complication in the form of a sexy ex? Meet Ray Here https://cathybrockman.com/2016/01/24/snippet-sunday-sweet-and-spicyno-not-the-latte/
A glance at a touch subject here; https://cathybrockman.com/2016/01/31/snippetsundaya-touchy-situation/
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6 responses to “#snippetsunday~~Decisions,Decisions”
“Your problem is over six foot tall and even though he has his own place he seems to stay at yours.”
Great line and one that lots of women can identify with! =)
I think I will pull this for a teaser LOL!! Thank you!
I’m not usually a fan of reading anything written in the present tense–despite how popular it’s become–but you do a wonderful job with it, perhaps because of the balance between narrative and dialogue. Thanks for sharing your work!
Thank you! You don’t know how much that means to me. I worry so much about that knowing First person is one of those love it or hate it things. I am hoping to change a few peoples minds or at the least win over a few fans LOL! This also I s very first draft as well so hopefully after a few beta readers and a good editor it will be even better. I love writing characters and Dialogue.
That’s another thing. You obviously give a great deal of thought to character development. Makes the reader want to keep going.
Thank you!! Coming from someone as skilled as you are that means a lot!